Dancing Snowflakes

The following poem was written by my daughter, Rebekah, age 12. Not mostly written by her with help from Dad. It’s all her, aside from a couple minor editing suggestions. She’s gifted, I think. Of course, I may be biased. :)

Dancing Snowflakes

The sun is gone, the night is near.

Snowflakes wake the pale, gray sky–

Flipping, whirling, dancing flakes,

Some with partners, others just fly!

As winds disperse the winter ball,

The friends take home a twisting path.

Morning breaks the joyful dance,

And the snowflakes come to a halt, at last!

The night is gone, the sun is near.

The dancers will be back — next year.

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10 Responses

  1. Great job, Rebekah!

  2. Excellent job, Rebekah. You may have your father’s poetic abilities, but here is to hoping that you look like your mother.

    Keep up the good work. May the Lord use your gift for Him.

  3. Rebekah, that’s beautiful. Outstanding, in the opinion of one who is definitely not a poet.

  4. This is really incredible! Did she really construct this imagining the dual level of the snow as an evening dance and the dance being the winter season? When I was that age, I just struggled with making words rhyme for assigned poems.
    You better be encouraging her to keep writing. Check out http://www.poeticpower.com.

  5. That’s great! Keep up the good work. You may just be our next great poet!

  6. The whole concept of the dance, the whirling, the halt, the seasons, etc. all amaze me. She’s not all about a sing-songy rhyme scheme, etc. I probably could learn a few things here. :)

    Thanks for the encouragement, all. I’ll check out the site, Dan. And I agree with your hopes, Andrew. :)

  7. Rebekah’s poem is beautiful! I can hear it in a choral concert anthem even now…

  8. Charming and imaginative. I needed something today to help me be positive about snow….ten more inches, and still falling…

  9. Very good!

  10. what a beautiful work of images…feelings so well personified…hope you continue to put in such lovely poems.
    From,
    an ardent admirer of nature and a poet herself!

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